During the holidays, the only things making me excited was the fact that it was the ‘holidays’ and that I would be enjoying a week up north. Thoughts came to mind about how much fun I would have, spending time with my family.
Hopping into the car, I tried to avoid sitting next to my menacing younger cousin. It would’ve been an even longer trip if I was sitting next to him. Lucky for me, I managed to get the entire back seat to myself.
I woke up uncertain of where I was as I was no longer in a car full of people and bags. I jumped out of the car, still half asleep and walked inside.
“Hello?” I said, peering through the slightly opened front door. No one was to be seen and no one was to be heard. Suddenly, I heard whispers and quiet footsteps. “BOO!” yelled one of my cousin’s. I screamed as though the whole town could hear it. Quickly, my cousin covered my mouth, shutting me up.
I looked at him evilly, while wondering where everyone else is. “Where is everyone?” I asked quietly. He dragged me out to the yard and when we got there, everyone popped out from hiding. Along with everyone else he yelled “RAAAAR!!!!” I screamed for so long, it was hard to forgive them.
Hi there Kaycee:)
ReplyDeleteIt's nice to hear that you're blogging again. So I've read your Writing Sample and it's amazing. Your punctuation is in the right places, you've started your story well and also ended it well. I really like it how you've put a lot of information in there for the reader. My favourite part in the story was when you looked at your cousin evilly. That was funny. So that's all I have to say.
Quziyah:))
Nice Work ! Kaycee :) I think that is a good sample . Its Puawai
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